Martin Burne's Brain Storm

Tag: sci-fi

  • Even more minor changes

    So there were a few things that didn’t feel right about the draft of Flight of Passion.  Isamura just had too many answers at the briefing, and I don’t think she should know everything.  So now instead she knows someone who deals in the kind of crystal that they need.  But there are no particular…

  • Update

    I’ve made a little progress. In the original draft, Isamura asked Caroline when she’s going to get some flying lessons.  It didn’t exactly work very well.  Now they have a much more interesting dialogue (regarding Erica) with parts of the original draft worked in subtly.  I haven’t got any further than that, with the new…